Heaven in 00 scale

by Dan Powell

No one believes me when I say my Grandad kept Heaven in his loft like someone might a train set. On visits he’d let me sit and watch the clouds swirl their irregular orbits above the gleaming spires. Squinting you could just make out, in miniature, the figure of Peter at the gates and sometimes, seeing me looking, he’d smile and wave. Grandad left me the house and often I head up to the loft and look for him amongst all those tiny souls but I can’t help thinking that man was just too great, even for Heaven.

Dan Powell is an English writer currently living in Germany.

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  1. #1 by The Malt House on June 8, 2011 - 11:20 am

    I love the idea of having heaven in the attic but wouldn’t know what to do with it! LOL! It would be better downstairs where it could be a conversation piece…

    Great story Dan

    Dave

  2. #2 by Roger Pattison on June 8, 2011 - 4:39 pm

    A jewel of a little piece. Lovely, and moving.

    Regards, Roger.

  3. #3 by Dan Powell on June 9, 2011 - 5:02 am

    Thanks for the kind words, Dave and Roger. Glad you liked my little story.

  4. #4 by Zoe on June 10, 2011 - 7:35 am

    Popped over from Twitter – I like this. It is just the kind of flash I like: very short and providing just a glimpse of something. Thanks!

  5. #5 by marc nash on June 10, 2011 - 7:37 am

    lovely and touching, pitch perfect tone

  6. #6 by flyingscribbler on June 10, 2011 - 9:31 am

    This was super: short and touching. But for some reason i keep thinking of ‘Beetlejuice’…..

  7. #7 by Dan Powell on June 10, 2011 - 6:06 pm

    @Zoe – Thanks for the kind words.

    @marc nash – Glad it spoke to you. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

    @ flyingscribbler – Glad you liked it. Been nearly two decades since I saw Beetlejuice. Your comment has me intrigued as to the connection as I only recall the bare bones of the story.

  8. #8 by Deanna Schrayer on June 10, 2011 - 7:30 pm

    This is great Dan! I’m not sure why but for some reason this brings steampunk to mind…maybe I’m just – weird? ;)
    In any case, it’s lovely!

  9. #9 by John Ritchie on June 10, 2011 - 9:52 pm

    Hi Dan

    There is a point in Beetlejuice when the young couple enter a minature world. I guess that is what is being referred to in this comment.

    Cheers

    John

  10. #10 by Glen on June 11, 2011 - 8:56 am

    spot on imagery

  11. #11 by adampb on June 12, 2011 - 7:45 am

    Great story, Dan. Master craftsman of words.
    Adam B @revhappiness

  12. #12 by Aidan Fritz on June 12, 2011 - 6:03 pm

    Dan, Beautiful. Nice concept, mixed with a good closing.

  13. #13 by Jackie on February 14, 2012 - 3:33 pm

    Moving little story Dan. Reminds me of a Model Village I used to visit as a child.

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