Occasional Cloud

By Sandra Davies

He regarded her, seriously, closely examining her face in a way she hadn’t experienced for some time. And although she was aware that the sun was shining full onto it, leaving his slightly shaded, it didn’t feel uncomfortable: she didn’t feel he was looking to criticise so much as to know her. As far as she could tell he’d not changed one iota since they’d last spoken, she couldn’t remember the quantity of hair he’d had then…

‘Has she upset you?’ he asked.

She was startled, almost into honesty, but caught herself in time, ‘Upset me? No, of course not,’ but he continued looking at her and there was something in his eyes that caused her to feel shame at her lie.

‘Well, no more than usual – you know.’ And she tried to laugh, to justify her half evasion, to dismiss the memory of their vitriolic breakfast conversation.

‘No,’ he said, as straightforward and uncompromisingly honest as she remembered him being. ‘I don’t know. I remember her as a bit confrontational, clever enough to use words to be hurtful, but I don’t know how she’d be with you.’

There was another pause, while he continued to look at her, no less gentle, but totally without guile, without … she realised, with a small shock .. any sort of social filter, any veil of politeness. Which was not to say he was rude, just … well, uncivilised sounded ruder still … and really, when ‘civilised’ too often meant two-faced bloody hypocrisy, it was no bad thing, once you got used to the idea. And in thinking that that was an idea, an approach she would like to get used to, she said, ‘Would you like a coffee? Have you time?’ and smiled again at his, ‘I’ve all day,’ as she led the way indoors.

Sandra Davies, author of Occasional Sunshine, has been writing for a year, and now has four books available on Blurb. She is a printmaker interested in family history and lives in Teesside.

  1. #1 by Paul D Brazill on April 14, 2011 - 9:12 am

    Splendid snapshot. I lot done in sew few words. Loved it.

  2. #2 by S de Assaf on April 14, 2011 - 9:25 am

    Interesting and thoughtful little piece. A nice fragment to ponder on.

  3. #3 by jennifer walmsley on April 14, 2011 - 9:45 am

    As the others have said, interesting, a tantalising snippet.

  4. #4 by Mike Handley on April 14, 2011 - 6:28 pm

    Amazing how, in just two short installments, you’ve endeared this rasta to me. As a longer story, there’s no end to the possibilities. As much as I adore the characters of Bridieland, this intimate little grouping is my favorite.

  5. #5 by Diana E. Backhouse on April 15, 2011 - 5:53 pm

    Another nice vignette, Sandra. I wonder what the weather forecast has in store for us next.

  6. #6 by Michael D. Brown on April 17, 2011 - 5:13 pm

    Crystal clear. The definition of civilized which you provide in that last paragraph is right on target, and the small conversation carries heavy weight. As usual, you have polished off another gem that makes us want to stay with these characters and learn more.

  7. #7 by Sandra Davies on April 18, 2011 - 4:51 am

    Your comments are very much appreciated and I thank you for taking the time to make them.
    I am hoping to write more of these two but am a bit mired at the moment …

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