The man waiting for a train

A Found Story. By Jessica Patient


“How is she?”

“When did that happen?”

“I can still win her back.”

….

“How did he propose?”

….

“What’s the ring like?”

….

“What a cheap bastard. So that means she isn’t really-”

….

“Their going to the jewelers tomorrow?”

“She’ll dump that loser once she sees me.”

….

“I’m on my way back. This is more important than the conference.”

….

“Make up anything, even invite her to your flat this evening and I’ll be there.”

….

“Ok, ok. Ring me back.”

Jessica Patient has been published at The Pygmy Giant, 3:AM and The Beat. Links to her other published works and blog can be found here. She lives in Bedfordshire, England.

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  1. #1 by Bob Jacobs on November 12, 2009 - 1:57 pm

    Nicely done.

    Cheers,
    Bob

  2. #2 by fiona campbell on November 14, 2009 - 5:02 pm

    love it, can even see the man on the platform, can hear him talking into his mobile…flash fiction at its very best.

  3. #3 by Teresa Stenson on November 14, 2009 - 8:17 pm

    Like it, Jess – though it took me a few reads to appreciate it, as soon as I got it was a phonecall it all came together – me being slow, I imagine :)

  4. #4 by Jared on November 18, 2009 - 9:52 pm

    Very unique to use a one-sided phone conversation as a literary device.

  5. #5 by Jessica on November 29, 2009 - 10:22 pm

    Thank you all for the great comments :)

    Jessica

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